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Carthas:
In order to increase your WIL (5), the Force of the Increase WIL spell has to be at least 5. The problem you run into is that the Focus can only sustain Force 4 or lower spells. An easy way to get around this and maintain your Drain Resistance would be to lower your WIL to 4 and raise your CHA to 6.
Attributes: No problem
Skills: It looks like you spent a bunch of karma on skills? The one thing I can't figure out is where your Skill Group points went. The only group that you could have spent it on was Sorcery, but then you would have had to spend 60 karma to raise Spellcasting to 6 and Counterspelling to 5, which doesn't make any sense. Remember that you can't break a skill group until the karma spending phase, so no getting Sorcery Group at 2 and then raising individual skills in the group with skill points. You may want to take another look at your skills.
Karma: Hard to tell with no accounting. You have 12 points of PQs and 22 points of NQs, so 35 points of karma to spend. Your foci require 16 karma to bond, so 19 karma left. Money starts to get a little tight once you factor in the two foci, Fake SIN, motorcycle, and Magic Circle materials, and multiple month lifestyles, but it seems like you could manage it with a little karma expenditure.
Looks pretty correct other than the skills part. I'd go over that one again.
Hope that helps! (Original message modified with input from 8-bit, h/tip)