The Pain Editor is also too high on Availability, which means that his tiny Stun track is gonna screw him right over.
And he won't be able to get it Used, since you cannot get Cultured Bioware Used.
Reaction Enhancers, by the way, won't stack with Suprathyroid gland. They do not stack with ANYTHING except Wireless-enabled (and thus hackable) Wired Reflexes.
Wait, does he have 22/10 as skills? That's not right, it's either 46/10 or 22/0.
His attributes are correct, actually. An Ork starts with 13 points, he's at 33 so he spent 20.
I see he put 15 karma into Contacts, and +25/-25 in Qualities, so he'd only have 10 karma left.
The gland would be 420k, Orthoskin 24k, Reaction Enhancers 26k, Pain Editor 48k, Titanium Lacing 30k, ~15k in other gear (no fake SIN, eh?), that's >560k where the maximum is 470 (450 + 10 karma).
By the way: Bone Lacing does NOT raise your Body. It merely raises your Body for Damage soaking.
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So let's see: He's Magic E, Skills D with 10 illegal skillgroup points, Race C with 1 Edge too little (Ork(0) means 1 Edge), Attributes B, Resources A +10 karma with 100k spent too much.
On top of that he's violating Augmentation Stacking, Availability, Rating and Augmented Maximum.
Corrected to Aluminium Lacing, Used Orthoskin 4, 8 Body without any boosts whatsoever: He'd have 12+4+2 Armor, 8 Body and +2+1 soak dice, for a total of a mere 29 soak dice. Honestly, I consider that no big deal whatsoever, given how with Used Orthoskin 4 and Used Bone Density Augmentation 4 he'd have had the same amount. And yes, I'm not suggesting he takes Used Titanium Lacing because that drains waaaay too much essence. And not even a helmet? What insanity is that?
Anyway, if he changes himself to ~30 soak dice, correct far-weaker stats and loses all those illegal skillgroups, he'll be really weak in the skill department and still get hurt with ease the second someone brings in a bigger gun. An Alpha with APDS ammo would do an average 4 damage and despite all that armor it will still do Physical Damage. (12 vs 18-6 is a tie, Physical Damage.)
By the way, if he ever starts stacking up even more armor without having a Pain Editor: Use Explosive Ammo, not APDS. If he has a helmet for 20 armor, then an Alpha's 11/-2 +1/-1 = 12/-3. It'd take 5 net hits to do physical damage, while with APDS he might take Physical (3+ NH) and might take Stun. You want to focus the damage on 1 damage track, so if he has a helmet Explosive ammo will be far better at knocking him unconscious.