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Title: young Oni Shinto Mystic Adept
Post by: The Dyslexic Won on <02-15-18/1202:38>
I'm looking to make a Ork (Oni) Shinto Mystic Adept

High schooler that had a bad run in with a vice-principal /Insect Spirit Shaman.

His school was ran be a prejudiced human who like have students do reports like why did the orks blow the tower up.  The stupid and violent trogs where only good for meanal labor and sports.  Teach them only in Or'zet and only what they 'need to know.'  The vice-principal said she could make the goblins into well behaved students thou a 'few' would die.  No loss, right.  Kidnapped at school, escaped the hive, locked up by the school guards and shipped back, escaped once more but did not go back to school this time.

 1st pass
== Priorities ==
Metatype: C,2
Attributes: A,4
Special: A,4
Skills: E,0
Resources: E,0

== Attributes ==
BOD: 7
AGI: 6
REA: 1
STR: 6 (9)
CHA: 7
INT: 4
LOG: 1
WIL: 5
EDG: 1
MAG: 6

== Derived Attributes ==
Essence:                   6.00
Initiative:                5 +1d6
Rigger Initiative:         5 +1d6
Astral Initiative:         8 +3d6
Matrix AR:                 5 +1d6
Matrix Cold:               5 +3d6
Matrix Hot:                5 +4d6
Physical Damage Track:     12
Stun Damage Track:         11

== Limits ==
Physical:                  9
Mental:                    4
Social:                    9
   Custom Ballistic Mask: +2, Only for Intimidation, Must be visible
   Securetech PPP: Arms Kit: -1, Must be visible
   Securetech PPP: Legs Kit: -1, Must be visible
   Securetech PPP: Vitals Kit: -1, Must be visible
Astral:                    9

== Active Skills ==
Assensing ([Aura Type])  Base: 6          Pool: 10 (12)
Con                      Base: 1          Pool: 8
Perception               Base: 1          Pool: 5
Running                  Base: 1          Pool: 10
Spellcasting             Base: 6          Pool: 12
Summoning                Base: 6          Pool: 13
Unarmed Combat           Base: 6          Pool: 17

== Knowledge Skills ==
English                  Native
Japanese                 Base: 1          Pool: 5
Or'zet                   Base: 1          Pool: 5
Club Music               Base: 1          Pool: 5
Cooking                  Base: 1          Pool: 2
Fashion                  Base: 1          Pool: 5
Magical Theory (Street)  Base: 1          Pool: 5
Magical Threats (Insect Spirits) Base: 1          Pool: 2 (4)
Sports (MMA)             Base: 1          Pool: 5 (7)

== Contacts ==

== Qualities ==
Low-Light Vision
Mentor Spirit (Shark)
Mystic Adept
Prejudiced (Common, Biased) (Humans)
Prejudiced (Specific, Biased) (Elf)
Records on File (---)
SINner (National) (UCAS)
Spirit Bane (Insect Spirits)
Striking Skin Pigmentation
The Spiritual Way

== Tradition ==
Shinto, Resist Drain with: WIL + CHA (12)

== Spells ==
Bug Zapper               DV: F+1
Chaos                    DV: F-2
Clout                    DV: F-3
Heal                     DV: F-4
Increase Reflexes        DV: F
Lightning Bolt           DV: F-3
Magic Fingers            DV: F-2
Physical Mask            DV: F-1
Stench                   DV: F-1
Stunbolt                 DV: F-3

== Powers ==
Astral Perception
Elemental Strike
Heightened Concentration
Improved Ability (skill) (Unarmed Combat)Rating: 3
Improved Physical Attribute (STR)Rating: 3
Improved Sense (damper)
Killing Hands

== Lifestyle ==
back room (Low) 1  Month
   + Cramped [--10%]
   + Dangerous Area [--20%]

== Armor ==
Armor Jacket                       12
   + Electrochromic Clothing
   + Illuminating
Custom Ballistic Mask              +2
Securetech PPP: Arms Kit           +1
Securetech PPP: Legs Kit           +1
Securetech PPP: Vitals Kit         +1
Urban Explorer Jumpsuit            9
   + Biomonitor

== Weapons ==
Unarmed Attack
   Pool: 17   Accuracy: 9   DV: 9P   AP: -   RC: 4

== Commlink ==
Meta Link (ATT: 0, SLZ: 0, DP: 1, FWL: 1)
   + Commlink Functionality [Camera, Micro, Chip Player, Credstick Reader, Earbuds, GPS Guidance System, Micro Trid-Projector, Music Player, RFID Tag Scanner, Shock- and Water-Resistant Case, Touchscreen Display]

== Gear: Equipped ==
Backpack (Cheap)
Certified Credstick, Standard ×3
Flashlight, Low-light
Respirator Rating 6
Subvocal Mic
Universal Connector Cord (Meter) ×5

Heightened Concentration
Improved Ability (skill) (Unarmed Combat)Rating: 3
Improved Physical Attribute (STR)Rating: 3
Improved Sense (damper)
Killing Hands

== Lifestyle ==
back room (Low) 1  Month
   + Cramped [--10%]
   + Dangerous Area [--20%]

== Armor ==
Armor Jacket                       12
   + Electrochromic Clothing
   + Illuminating
Custom Ballistic Mask              +2
Securetech PPP: Arms Kit           +1
Securetech PPP: Legs Kit           +1
Securetech PPP: Vitals Kit         +1
Urban Explorer Jumpsuit            9
   + Biomonitor

== Weapons ==
Unarmed Attack
   Pool: 17   Accuracy: 9   DV: 9P   AP: -   RC: 4

== Commlink ==
Meta Link (ATT: 0, SLZ: 0, DP: 1, FWL: 1)
   + Commlink Functionality [Camera, Micro, Chip Player, Credstick Reader, Earbuds, GPS Guidance System, Micro Trid-Projector, Music Player, RFID Tag Scanner, Shock- and Water-Resistant Case, Touchscreen Display]

== Gear: Equipped ==
Backpack (Cheap)
Certified Credstick, Standard ×3
Flashlight, Low-light
Respirator Rating 6
Subvocal Mic
Universal Connector Cord (Meter) ×5
Title: Re: young Oni Shinto Mystic Adept
Post by: Marcus on <02-15-18/1240:31>
Your init is 5, even if you crush improved ref spells, your init won't be amazing, and will be very RNG, but the bigger issue is your base dodge pool is 5 dice, sure resistance pool of 25 is nice, but not getting shot will take a lot farther a lot faster. Armor pen is everywhere.

I'd recommend drops the power points in str grab critical strike (unarmed) and some weapon focus knucks, to help push your pool to 20, and you will only lose 1 level of damage while gaining up to 3 pts for pool. Use the 2.5 pts you freed up to get some combat sense, that would give you another 5 dice, 10 is big step in the right direction.
Title: Re: young Oni Shinto Mystic Adept
Post by: The Dyslexic Won on <02-15-18/1321:40>
Thank you Marcus, the weapon focus is something I will pick up after a few runs

hmm...

== Priorities ==
Metatype: C,2
Attributes: A,4
Special: A,4
Skills: E,0
Resources: E,0

== Attributes ==
BOD: 7
AGI: 6
REA: 1
STR: 6 (7)
CHA: 7
INT: 4
LOG: 1
WIL: 5
EDG: 1
MAG: 6

== Derived Attributes ==
Essence:                   6.00
Initiative:                5 +1d6
Rigger Initiative:         5 +1d6
Astral Initiative:         8 +3d6
Matrix AR:                 5 +1d6
Matrix Cold:               5 +3d6
Matrix Hot:                5 +4d6
Physical Damage Track:     12
Stun Damage Track:         11

== Limits ==
Physical:                  8
Mental:                    4
Social:                    9
   Custom Ballistic Mask: +2, Only for Intimidation, Must be visible
   Securetech PPP: Arms Kit: -1, Must be visible
   Securetech PPP: Legs Kit: -1, Must be visible
   Securetech PPP: Vitals Kit: -1, Must be visible
Astral:                    9

== Active Skills ==
Assensing ([Aura Type])  Base: 6          Pool: 10 (12)
Con                      Base: 1          Pool: 8
Perception               Base: 1          Pool: 5
Running                  Base: 1          Pool: 8
Spellcasting             Base: 6          Pool: 12
Summoning                Base: 6          Pool: 13
Unarmed Combat           Base: 6          Pool: 17

== Knowledge Skills ==
English                  Native
Japanese                 Base: 1          Pool: 5
Or'zet                   Base: 1          Pool: 5
Club Music               Base: 1          Pool: 5
Cooking                  Base: 1          Pool: 2
Fashion                  Base: 1          Pool: 5
Magical Theory (Street)  Base: 1          Pool: 5
Magical Threats (Insect Spirits) Base: 1          Pool: 2 (4)
Sports (MMA)             Base: 1          Pool: 5 (7)

== Qualities ==
Low-Light Vision
Mentor Spirit (Shark)
Mystic Adept
Prejudiced (Common, Biased) (Humans)
Prejudiced (Specific, Biased) (Elfs)
Records on File (---)
SINner (National) (UCAS)
Spirit Bane (Bugs)
Striking Skin Pigmentation
The Spiritual Way

== Tradition ==
Shinto, Resist Drain with: WIL + CHA (12)

== Spells ==
Bug Zapper               DV: F+1
Chaos                    DV: F-2
Clout                    DV: F-3
Heal                     DV: F-4
Increase Reflexes        DV: F
Lightning Bolt           DV: F-3
Magic Fingers            DV: F-2
Physical Mask            DV: F-1
Stench                   DV: F-1
Stunbolt                 DV: F-3

== Powers ==
Astral Perception
Combat SenseRating: 3
Critical Strike (Unarmed Combat)
Elemental Strike
Heightened Concentration
Improved Ability (skill) (Unarmed Combat)Rating: 3
Improved Physical Attribute (STR)Rating: 1
Improved Sense (damper)
Killing Hands

== Lifestyle ==
back room (Low) 1  Month
   + Cramped [--10%]
   + Dangerous Area [--20%]

== Armor ==
Armor Jacket                       12
   + Electrochromic Clothing
   + Illuminating
Custom Ballistic Mask              +2
Securetech PPP: Arms Kit           +1
Securetech PPP: Legs Kit           +1
Securetech PPP: Vitals Kit         +1
Urban Explorer Jumpsuit            9
   + Biomonitor

== Weapons ==
Unarmed Attack
   Pool: 17   Accuracy: 8   DV: 8P   AP: -   RC: 4

== Commlink ==
Meta Link (ATT: 0, SLZ: 0, DP: 1, FWL: 1)
   + Commlink Functionality [Camera, Micro, Chip Player, Credstick Reader, Earbuds, GPS Guidance System, Micro Trid-Projector, Music Player, RFID Tag Scanner, Shock- and Water-Resistant Case, Touchscreen Display]

== Gear: Equipped ==
Backpack (Cheap)
Certified Credstick, Standard ×3
Flashlight, Low-light
Respirator Rating 6
Subvocal Mic
Universal Connector Cord (Meter) ×5
Title: Re: young Oni Shinto Mystic Adept
Post by: ZeldaBravo on <02-17-18/0024:31>
Just hopping in to second Marcus.
You'll be much, MUCH safer with BOD 3 REA 5 than BOD 7 REA 1. You'll dodge more often and you'll be landing your hits first more often. It gets even more important with 1 edge you have.
Title: Re: young Oni Shinto Mystic Adept
Post by: Glyph on <02-17-18/1745:33>
Yep.  Dodging beats damage soaking because you only need to beat an opponent's hits when dodging, while for damage soaking you are resisting a (usually high) base damage value plus net hits, which is a lot harder to do.  This is why so few builds make Reaction a dump stat - it is not only a component of initiative, but also part of your vitally important passive dodging.
Title: Re: young Oni Shinto Mystic Adept
Post by: The Dyslexic Won on <02-17-18/1805:56>
Thank you!   hmm, thou karma costs are cheaper for lower stats.  I have 10 from playing a pregen that I can use once I move to career.