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FreezeBoxJawsh

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« on: <07-29-14/2131:19> »
Girl friend joined our Shadow Run group after watching us play and had me build her a character but we are both fairly new so with some help from the GM and her general idea for "something thats fast and nasty in a fight but still sexy" i created essentially an Cliche Anime Heroine with lots of attitude. Now that we have played a few games and aquired some Karma our GM says its up to us to figure out what to spend it on so im looking for suggestions

Name: Elsie Stephanis     Elf Female Adept Gunslinger   Code name: Winter Fang

Priority:   A) Attributes  B) Race  C) Skills  D) Magic   E) Resources

Attributes:  Body- 5                              Intuition- 4
                    Agility- 7                             Logic- 2
                    Reaction-5 (7)                  Willpower- 3
                    Strength- 5                        Edge - 3
                    Charisma- 3                     Magic - 6
                    Initiative:  9 (11) + 1d6 (3d6)

Limits:  Phy- 7    Mental- 4   Soc-5
Phy Condition-  11      Stun- 10

Adept Powers:   
Attribute boost  agility 4 ,1pp
combat sense   1,   0.5 pp
enhanced accuracy  Pistol and automatics  2 ,  0.5 pp
Improved Reflexes  2  ,   2.5 pp
Mystic Armor    2,   1 pp
Spell Resist     1,   0.5 pp

Active Skills:
Survival Skill group -  2
Automatics -  5                    Running - 2
Pistols -  5                            Sneak - 5   (urban +2)   
Longarms  - 3                     Perception - 3
Unarmed - 3                       Etiquette - 2
Gymnastics  -4                   Con - 2
First Aid  - 1                          Pilot Guard Craft- 1

Knowledge/ Language:  12 points
Weapon Manufacture: 4
Japanese: 2
Sperethiel: 2
English:   4

Qualities:  Code of Honor: No Killing the Unarmed or Innocent
                   Unique Style:  Dressed as a Kunoichi with a blue kimono with snowflakes on it and a white terracotta Fox Mask
                   Catlike
                   Quick Healer
                   Natural Athlete
10 Karma used for cash

Low life style
Armor jacket with Chem-2 Fire Res-2  Non Conduct-3
Contacts Capacity 3 with smartlink and vision enhance 1
Earbuds  Cap 3  with audio Enhance 1
Gecko Tape Gloves
Medkit 3
Sony Emperor Comlink

Weapons:
Lead Lined fingerless gloves   : 6p
Ares Predator V:  100 reg, 60 apds
Ingram smartgun X: 100 reg 70 shock
Pjss Model 55: 50 reg  40 flachette
Ak97: 100 reg 50 gel 50 apds      ---> 360 reg picked up in a gun smuggling depot we liberated from a Huge Troll named Roadblock
Tazer ----> 6 cartridges picked up in the same depot

Nuyen current: 2640       Karma current:25



         







   

       

Davidvs

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« Reply #1 on: <07-29-14/2148:38> »
You get a native language for free.
You could use those points to put into knowledge of Japanese culture or something else.

FreezeBoxJawsh

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« Reply #2 on: <07-29-14/2204:52> »
ooooh excellent she wanted knowledge of underworld/ black markets

moonlightshadow13

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« Reply #3 on: <07-30-14/0044:03> »
You could initiate and get adept centering/ 1 more pp

Marcus

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« Reply #4 on: <07-30-14/0101:58> »
Pistols, automatics and longarms? Overly complicated imo. I'd pick one or two and unarmed and get them to 6. Consider specializing.

Also I think your attributes are 1 point under spent I keep getting 23 can someone else double check that, make sure I'm not missing something?

I'd also recommend a fake sin, and some fake licenses.
 
Lots of things you can do with karma

some contacts perhaps?
 
« Last Edit: <07-30-14/0127:05> by Marcus »
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ZeldaBravo

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« Reply #5 on: <07-30-14/0236:02> »
I agree with both Marcus and moonlightshadow, those are good advices.
Get a fake SIN, check your attributes, initiate ASAP.
I also suggest you to pick heavy weapons instead of long arms.
If you want an gunslinger adept anime heroine in shadowrun then Revi from Black Lagoon is the closest one you can get. BL is like "Shadowrun: the anime".
*I have problems with clarifying my point in English, so sometimes I might sound stupid or rude.*

Medicineman

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« Reply #6 on: <07-30-14/0351:46> »
hmmm, some tipps :
You don't really need Attribute AGI at level 4 lvl 1 or 2 is enough
at level 4 the Drain is to high compared to the possible Gain
with MAG 6 and AGI boost 2 youll have 8 Dice and 2-3 Hits with a Drain of 2
with AGI boost 4 you'll have 10 Dice but a Drain of 4 ;)
And I consider Comnbat sense more effective than mystic Armor .
If oud switch Mystic Armor for another level of Combat Sense (and lower AGI Boost --->2 for a 3rd Level of Combat sense
You'd have 14 Dice to "dodge Bullets"
ImO its better to ntot get hit in the first place instead of having 1 more Dice to resist Damage

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enhanced accuracy  Pistol and automatics  2 ,  0.5 pp
?? its 0.5 per Skill  so its 1.0 PP total I didn't say anything  ;)

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Tarislar

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« Reply #7 on: <07-30-14/1659:58> »
Priority:   A) Attributes  B) Race  C) Skills  D) Magic   E) Resources

Attributes:  Body- 5                              Intuition- 4
                    Agility- 7                             Logic- 2
                    Reaction-5 (7)                  Willpower- 3
                    Strength- 5                        Edge - 3
                    Charisma- 3                     Magic - 6
                    Initiative:  9 (11) + 1d6 (3d6)

Does she need a 5 Str really as a Gunslinger ?  I'm thinking some of those points would be better off in your Mental stats.
Also, you seem to be short a single point.
Finally, I'd never invest in a L2 attribute w/ Points, use Karma to raise from L1 or invest at least L3 in it.
I'd probably set her up as follows.
B-5, A-7, R-4, S-2, W-5, L-3, I-5, C-5  (Used 10 Karma for S2)   



Adept Powers:   
Attribute boost  agility 4 ,1pp
combat sense   1,   0.5 pp
enhanced accuracy  Pistol and automatics  2 ,  0.5 pp
Improved Reflexes  2  ,   2.5 pp
Mystic Armor    2,   1 pp
Spell Resist     1,   0.5 pp

As mentioned, you only need 1 Level of Agility Boost.
Combat Sense, is better than Armor as mentioned,  with ONE exception,  DON'T get Surprised.  If you do you'll wish you had the armor.
Maybe change around as follows.
Agility Boost-1
Combat Sense-3
Enh Accuracy-Pistols
Imp.Reflexes-3
Imp.Sense-Damper



Active Skills:
Survival Skill group -  2
Automatics -  5                    Running - 2
Pistols -  5                            Sneak - 5   (urban +2)   
Longarms  - 3                     Perception - 3
Unarmed - 3                       Etiquette - 2
Gymnastics  -4                   Con - 2
First Aid  - 1                          Pilot Guard Craft- 1

28 Skill Points & 2 Groups Points.
I'm not a fan of Pistols + Automatics + LongArms w/o the Firearms Group.
Either Pistols + Long Arms or Automatics solo.  You can get Pistols, Rifles, & Shotguns that all have some Burst/Auto ability on them.
I'd have to set up as follows.
Group-Athletics-2  or  Group-Influence-2  (w/ the Higher CHA-5 above)
LongArms-6,  Rifles+2
Perception-6, Visual+2
Pistols-6, Semi-Auto+2
Sneaking-6, Urban+2
Drop all those 2's to just 1's w/ Karma for now.  Can buy L2 later.



Japanese: 2
Sperethiel: 2
English:   4
Your missing a Native language here for No-Points.
Also, throw in specialization speaking, no one reads anymore :) 



Qualities:  Code of Honor: No Killing the Unarmed or Innocent
                   Unique Style:  Dressed as a Kunoichi with a blue kimono with snowflakes on it and a white terracotta Fox Mask
                   Catlike
                   Quick Healer
                   Natural Athlete
10 Karma used for cash
Drop Quick Healer for a Mentor Spirit IMHO, some solid ones for this type of character would be,  Wolf, Raven, Cat, Mediator, DragonSlayer, Eagle


Armor jacket with Chem-2 Fire Res-2  Non Conduct-3
Contacts Capacity 3 with smartlink and vision enhance 1
Earbuds  Cap 3  with audio Enhance 1
Sony Emperor Comlink
Check out the Globetrotter Jacket in R&G for EnviroProtection built in.
Your Contacts & Earbuds are missing some stuff if you are buying them at Cap-3.
Get a better Commlink than that.



Karma current:25
Only 7 Karma allowed to be kept at Char-gen.

Gasp

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« Reply #8 on: <07-30-14/1729:09> »
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enhanced accuracy  Pistol and automatics  2 ,  0.5 pp
?? its 0.5 per Skill  so its 1.0 PP total

Its 0.25 per weapon skill, so its 0.5pp total. But there is no level for this power (only +1 precision for a weapon skill)