@Socinus:
Ok, I have several issues with your build but I need to review it a little more to give you a complete assessment. I'll post more a little later. I need a BP breakdown of your character. The most glaring problem though is having a Resonance of 7. Maximum is 6. Then you also have a heavy pistol but you don't have a skill for heavy pistols. Look at Fastjacks code and fill that out. It's the best way to show a character here on the forums.
I didnt use the BP system, I used Karma. Which is how I got a Resonance of 7, with 1 rank of Submersion. The weapon is a pistol-sized grenade launcher.
The breakdown
Stats- 305
Resonance- 281
Active Skills- 182
Knowledge/Language- 29
Positive Qualities- 10
Negative Qualities- -80
Resources- 2
Contacts- 20
Total = 749 spent out of 750 Karma
[spoiler]
Name: Tolan
Alias: Firewall
Race: Elf
Sex: Male
Nationality: American
Lifestyle: Low
Karma Spent: 749
Physical Description: Tolan is fond of wearing non-descript clothing and concealed armor. He is most often seen wearing a hooded sweatshirt and dark cargo pants with work boots. He also frequently carries around a backpack or messenger bag which he keeps close to his person, almost never removing it.
In the few Matrix encounters that have been recorded with Tolan his icon appears as a paramilitary figure, masked and heavily armored. It carries a large grenade launcher in which the grenades take the form of the programs he uses.
Personality/background Earliest records recovered from Mitsuhama project on the investigation of the Technomancer phenomenon. Tolan was enrolled by his parents at 16 in a front group that posed as a support group for newly emerging Technomancers and their parents. Several years after enrolling, Tolan was reported missing after not coming home after school. Few details exist of the time Tolan spent at Mitsuhama but from recovered data it is reasonable to assume that he endured extremely injurious conditions while at Mitsuhama.
The project Tolan was held by was halted five years after he was brought in. An explosion destroyed half the facility the project was housed in and many of the participants escaped, Tolan among them. The cause of the explosion was blamed on faulty equipment; however the presence of chemical residue after the explosion contradicts this theory. Over the next few years, Tolan rarely surfaced for long. Recently, Tolan has come into the shadows as a full-fledged runner, borrowing a significant sum of money (In Debt 15,000) to finance his entry and the pursuit of his goals.
Tolan seems motivated by revenge (Vendetta and Enemy (4) = Mitsuhama) for his years of captivity. His hatred of Mitsuhama and its allies should not be underestimated. His demeanor is quiet and non-confrontational, preferring to sit and wait for a target to come to an optimal position rather than a direct assault. This is counter-balanced by his use of explosives, something he greatly enjoys. Tolan almost seems to consider his devices to be works of art, taking deep pride in being able to create massive amounts of destruction or death to a single person in the middle of a crowd without so much as ruffling the shirt of the person next to the target. His penchant for creative applications when it comes to explosives, and his tendency to opt for maximum damage whenever given free reign to do so, has earned him the nickname Firewall.
Tolan’s operation is methodical, careful, and subtle right until the moment his plans are activated. Someone walking away from a confrontation with Tolan feeling victorious had better be cautious. They may find that their vehicle has been augmented with…explosive new features.
AttributesBody | Agility | Reaction | Strength |
3 | 5 | 3 | 2 |
Charisma | Intuition | Logic | Willpower |
3 | 4 | 5 | 5 |
Edge | Magic/Resonance | Essence | Initiative |
1 | 7 | 6 | 7 |
Positive QualitiesNone
Negative QualitiesIn Debt (15,000)
Vendetta (MCT)
Enemy (4) (MCT)
Active SkillsHeavy Weapons (Grenade Launchers) 4 (+2)
Demolitions 5
Electronics (Group) 3
Tasking (Group)
Hacking 4
Electronic Warfare 3
Knowledge Skills
IED Design 4
High Energy Chemistry 3
Matrix Security 4
Language Skills
English N
Spells/Complex Forms/Programs
Edit 7
Decrypt 7
Exploit 7
Stealth 7
Smartlink 1
Gear
8 x Mini Flash-Bang Grenade
8 x Mini Fragmentation Grenade
Concealable Holster
8 x Mini High Explosive Grenade
Miniwelder
Glue Sprayer
Goggles (1-6) Rtg 4
Flare Compensation
Thermographic
Vision Enhancement R(1-3) Rtg 3
Low Light
Kit
Subvocal Microphone
Chemistry Shop
Gas Mask
10 x Spare Clips
Contacts
Army EOD Officer (5/5)[/spoiler]