[Koshnek]

Ok, so I'm trying to create a circus member. He's Egyptian and also follows the same Tradition/Religion. He uses his magic to help him put on shows for the circus, but he's also supposed to be combat capable. I haven't done contacts, but I think hes pretty cool right now. I intend to pick up the Improve Strength spell quickly to help with the range on his bow and damage on his sword. I dropped a couple of points in magic for extra edge because I thought it'd be more useful for him to have the edge being he basically only uses sorcery. Ill use some karma to sustain those buffs so he doesn't get nailed with penalties.

== Info ==
Street Name: Ramesses
Name: Abdelrahman Mustafa Khaled
Movement: 6/12
Karma: 0
Street Cred: 0
Notoriety: 0
Public Awareness: 0
Human Male Age 53
Height 5'6" Weight 155 lbs
Composure: 9
Judge Intentions: 9
Lift/Carry: 5 (45 kg/30 kg)
Memory: 8
Nuyen: 475

== Priorities ==
Metatype: D - Human or Elf
Attributes: B - 20 Attributes
Special: C - Adept, Magician or Technomancer
Skills: A - 46 Skills/10 Skill Groups
Resources: E - 6,000¥

== Karma ==
25
+7 Aged
+5 Distinctive Style
+8 Gremlins 2
+5 Illness 1
50 Karma
-5 Mentor Spirit
-16 Focused Concentration 4
-10 20000¥
-15 Spells
-4 Bonded Health Sustaining Foci R2
 
== Attributes ==
BOD: 2
AGI: 3
REA: 2
STR: 3
CHA: 4
INT: 5
LOG: 4
WIL: 5
EDG: 4
MAG: 4

== Derived Attributes ==
Essence:                   6
Initiative:                8 + 1d6
Rigger Initiative:         8 + 1d6
Astral Initiative:         12 + 2d6
Matrix AR Initiative:      8 + 1d6
Matrix Cold Initiative:    6 + DP + 3d6
Matrix Hot Initiative:     6 + DP + 4d6
Physical Damage Track:     9
Stun Damage Track:         11

== Limits ==
Physical:                  4
Mental:                    6
Social:                    7
   Ballistic Mask [+1] (Only for intimidation, Must be visible)
Astral:                    7

== Active Skills ==
Arcana                     : 4 [Spell Design]       Pool: 7 (9)
Archery                    : 4 [Bow]                Pool: 7 (9)
Assensing                  : 3                      Pool: 9
Blades                     : 1 [Swords]             Pool: 4 (6)
Con                        : 6                      Pool: 12
Counterspelling            : 6                      Pool: 10
Disguise                   : 1 [Theatrical]         Pool: 7 (9)
Etiquette                  : 2                      Pool: 6
Forgery                    : 4 [Counterfeiting]     Pool: 7 (9)
Gymnastics                 : 4                      Pool: 7
Impersonation              : 3 [Human]              Pool: 7 (9)
Perception                 : 1 [Visual]                     Pool: 7 (9)
Performance                : 3 [Acting]             Pool: 7 (9)
Ritual Spellcasting        : 6                      Pool: 10
Running                    : 4                      Pool: 7
Sneaking                   : 6                      Pool: 9
Spellcasting               : 6                      Pool: 10
Swimming                   : 4                      Pool: 7
(Skill Groups: Sorcery 6, Athletics 4)

== Knowledge Skills ==
Ancient Egyptian           : 1                      Pool: 7
Arabic                     : N                      Pool: 0
English                    : 1                      Pool: 7
History                    : 4 [Middle East]        Pool: 7 (9)
Literature                 : 1 [Middle East]        Pool: 4 (6)
Magical Theory             : 2                      Pool: 5
Magical Threats            : 1                      Pool: 4
Parazoology                : 1                      Pool: 4
Religion                   : 6 [Ancient Egyptian]   Pool: 9 (11)
Shadow Community           : 3                      Pool: 9

== Qualities ==
Aged (Rating 1)
Aspected Magician
Distinctive Style
Focused Concentration (Rating 4)
Gremlins (Rating 2)
Illness (Rating 1)
Mentor Spirit (Chaos [Used as Placeholder for the god Set, seemed appropriate])

== Spells ==
(Tradition: Egyptian, Resist Drain with WIL + INT (11))
Ball Lightning             DV: F-1
Entertainment              DV: F-3
Foreboding                    DV: F-3
Increase Reflexes          DV: F
Increase Strength      DV: F -3
Phantasm                   DV: F-1
Translate                  DV: F-4
Watcher                    DV: Special

== Lifestyles ==
Robert Cromwell  1 months

== Armor ==
Armor Jacket                        12
Ballistic Mask                      2
   +Vision Enhancement Rating 3
Clothing                            0
Forearm Guards                      1
Snake Mesh Socks                    0

== Weapons ==
Bow (Rating 3)
   Pool: 7 (9)   Accuracy: 6   DV: 5P   AP: -   RC: 1
Sword
   Pool: 4 (6)   Accuracy: 6   DV: 6P   AP: -2   RC: 1
Unarmed Attack
   Pool: 2   Accuracy: 4   DV: 3S   AP: -   RC: 1

== Commlink ==
Meta Link (ATT: 0, SLZ: 0, DP: 1, FWL: 1)

== Gear ==
Arrow: Injection (Bows) Rating 3 x5
   +Narcoject
Arrow: Standard (Bows) Rating 3 x10
Arrow: Stick-n-Shock w/Static Shaft (Bows) Rating 3 x5
Certified Credstick, Gold
Certified Credstick, Silver
Certified Credstick, Standard
Chisel
Contacts Rating 3
   +Image Link
   +Vision Magnification
   +Low Light
Cram x2
Fake SIN (Robert Cromwell) Rating 1
Jazz
Kamikaze
Long Haul
Magical Lodge Materials Rating 6
Micro-Transceiver
Psyche x2
Reagents, per dram x100
Sustaining Focus, Health (Bonded Foci) Rating 2
Tool Kit (Disguise)
Tool Kit (Forgery)

== Description ==
Ramses is a man of average height and build. His old face is wrinkled by time, but the handsome face of his youth hasn't been completely obscured. He has shoulder length black hair which is kept well groomed, and he always wears ancient egyptian attire.

He has a standard armor jacket and ballistic mask if the situation calls for it.

== Background ==
Ramesses was born in Egypt during the 2020's. He had some magical talent, but he never figured out how to use it properly. He took a liking to ancient egyptian history during school, and he was one of the first to begin learning and practicing the old ways as the Egyptian tradition. Eventually, the government cracked down on this practice, and he had to flee the country. What he learned up to then was invaluable to him, however, as was it to many others who struggled to grasp their magic.

Ramses learned some skills skulking around in the shadows and ruins, and he always had a flair for the dramatic so he fell in with the circuis not long after ariving in the UCAS. Using his magic and skills, Ramessess puts on magnificent shows for the circuis audience. Mummies, flesh eating scarabs, chariot fights...anything that gets the crowd out of their seats and cheering. Having a combat capable mage on staff is always a welcome addition for the circuis.

He's been with the circus longer than most, and he's content to stay there. He keeps an eye open for new developments within his tradition, but he doesn't often stray from the Circus unless its for the Circus.

== Notes ==
Rammesses' sword is a Khopesh, and his bow is a compbound bow.

[8-bit]

Not sure where your karma is spent, but you have at least 35 Karma spent on just spells. Seems kind of a waste to me. I would honestly just go full Magician at Priority C and take only spellcasting stuff. It ends up with a similar result, but probably way less karma spent. If you are sticking with an Aspected Magician, could you please show where you spent all your skill group points? I'm guessing Sorcery 6 and Athletics 4, but I am not sure. I would also possibly rearrange some of your attributes as well. Even if it's just Intuition 6 and Logic 3.

[Koshnek]

Sorry, I forgot that Chummer5 doesn't list skill groups or karma expenditures in the text block. I added them manually.

If I change from Aspected to Magician I lose a point of either Edge or Magic. I'd gain 5 free spells, though. I could keep all the spells I have now for 25 karma back.

So swap priorities for 4 magic/4 edge (instead of 5 edge), pick up Increase Strength spell, and add some levels of focused concentration?

I could do the Intutition <--> Logic swap too without much of a problem too. It'd give me an extra drain dice if nothing else.

[8-bit]

Yeah, you really wouldn't lose much in terms of magic/edge, since you already have magic pretty low. The main thing is that you get 25 Karma back, which you can either spend on more spells, qualities, etc. Also, the Intuition and Logic swap was for the drain dice mostly. Every die counts when you try to overcast a spell for combat.

[Tarislar]

Ugh, Skills-A, such a trap.  Looks so pretty on paper w/ Karma calculator.  Never quite works out that way.

Why Armorer-1 at Char-Gen ?   Its just one of those skills that is better gotten later, IMHO.

I'd honestly look at what it is you really want to do with this character.
Do you want to be a Mage, or do you want to be a Circus Infiltrator? 
Because they kind of don't really go together.

That said, I'd probably look at a few changes similar to what was suggested above.

Maybe rework for more Attr points & higher Magic.

A-Attr, B-Skills, C-Magic, D-Human, E-Cash

B3, A5, R4, S3, W5, L3, I6, C3
Eg-3, Mag-6, Ess-6, Itv-10+1d

Group-Conjuring-5
Assensing-6
Con-6
Counterspelling-1
Perception-6
Sneaking-6
SpellCasting-6   (Illusions+2)
Throwing Weapons-6

Spells:
Lighting Bolt
Clairvoyance
Heal
Increased Reflexes
Improved Invisibility
Levitate
Shapechange


Karma Spending -50
Mentor Spirit -5
FocCon-2 -8
Spells -10
Cash -10
Edge -15

I know its not Injection Arrows & Athletics but what can I say, Throwing Knives & Sneaking around just screams circus performer to me.
I picked out some different spells that I also like the feel of.  Something about the support spells makes me thing circus gypsy.

[saithor]

Ugh, Skills-A, such a trap.  Looks so pretty on paper w/ Karma calculator.  Never quite works out that way.

Why Armorer-1 at Char-Gen ?   Its just one of those skills that is better gotten later, IMHO.

I'd honestly look at what it is you really want to do with this character.
Do you want to be a Mage, or do you want to be a Circus Infiltrator? 
Because they kind of don't really go together.

That said, I'd probably look at a few changes similar to what was suggested above.

Maybe rework for more Attr points & higher Magic.

A-Attr, B-Skills, C-Magic, D-Human, E-Cash

B3, A5, R4, S3, W5, L3, I6, C3
Eg-3, Mag-6, Ess-6, Itv-10+1d

Group-Conjuring-5
Assensing-6
Con-6
Counterspelling-1
Perception-6
Sneaking-6
SpellCasting-6   (Illusions+2)
Throwing Weapons-6

Spells:
Lighting Bolt
Clairvoyance
Heal
Increased Reflexes
Improved Invisibility
Levitate
Shapechange


Karma Spending -50
Mentor Spirit -5
FocCon-2 -8
Spells -10
Cash -10
Edge -15

I know its not Injection Arrows & Athletics but what can I say, Throwing Knives & Sneaking around just screams circus performer to me.
I picked out some different spells that I also like the feel of.  Something about the support spells makes me thing circus gypsy.

Just want to second Tarislar, this character is probably a good representation of what you want while still being very good. You can swap the spells out as you like, but most of them are spells that would work very well for a circus performer: Shapechange, Levitate,Increased Reflexes, Improved Invisibilty

[Koshnek]

I get where you're coming from, but it doesn't quite fit with who he is : /. Ramesses uses mostly Egyptian themed spells. (Improved Str/Reflexes could come from Osiris, Lightning Ball from Set, Translate from Thoth, etc.). I picked a couple from the preferred spells for the Egyptian Tradition. He also isn't too magically capable (Low Magic/Was originally supposed to be aspected sorcerer). Thats why he uses the bow and the sword. They're the arms his ancestors used, and His sword is actually a Khopesh which is a somewhat curved sword. (Different from a scimatar).

He isn't a standard circus performer who juggles knives and jumps the high rope. He's the Mummy man. If they put him in the big tent, he puts on Egyptian Themed performances whether that be a lion hunt or a raging chariot battle. So he has some acting skills too.

I dropped Palming and Armorer completely. I shouldn't have had it in the first place because youre right he isn't an infiltrator. I used the points to bump stealth because he doesn't have invis, and stealth can be useful :p.

I could drop Focused Concentration down to 3 and unbind my sustaining focus to free up 8 karma if something else would be  more useful. Having both lets me sustain both buffs if I need to, and I could use Focused Concentration for anything.

Is he just not gunna work? I can see how he might be subpar to start, but he should be fun though I think. I could be wrong though :p. My PbPs tend to fall before I get anywhere and I've only really played combat chars in person/Roll20.

Edited OP to reflect the changes made.