You might also want to list out how the starting karma was spent. The mage looks like she has 1 Attribute point too many but I'm guessing you improved Charisma with starting karma.
If these are for starting characters then you might want to call out certain bonuses, like what the advantages are for Dragonslayer. (I'm guessing the mage is using the +2 to Etiquette, as she doesn't have any other social skills.)
For the mage, what's the goal of having Pistols 6? If she wants to kill something she should be casting spells at it. If she wants to kill something without having to cast spells, she should at least use a heavy pistol. If she just wants to look less like a mage, she might prefer Automatics and suppressive fire. Those are valuable skill points that could be put toward Perception or Sneaking, or Logic-based skills (like First Aid) to leverage her Logic 6.